Re: Doc: Correct and extend infos about LilyDev setup (issue 561360043 by address@hidden)

[nine . fierce . ballads]

Good work.  Needs some revision.


https://codereview.appspot.com/561360043/diff/547520043/Documentation/contributor/quick-start.itexi
File Documentation/contributor/quick-start.itexi (right):

https://codereview.appspot.com/561360043/diff/547520043/Documentation/contributor/quick-start.itexi#newcode94
Documentation/contributor/quick-start.itexi:94: The zip archive you
downloaded containes the raw disk image and
containes -> contains

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Documentation/contributor/quick-start.itexi:152: @q{Extended features:
Enable EFI}.  Otherwise you won't be
... Enable EFI}; otherwise, ...

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Documentation/contributor/quick-start.itexi:159: interaction with your
mouse pointer on both the host and guest and let
... guest, and let ...

https://codereview.appspot.com/561360043/diff/547520043/Documentation/contributor/quick-start.itexi#newcode188
Documentation/contributor/quick-start.itexi:188: You can change the
password of the @q{dev} user similarly, just call
... similarly; just call ...

https://codereview.appspot.com/561360043/diff/547520043/Documentation/contributor/quick-start.itexi#newcode204
Documentation/contributor/quick-start.itexi:204: At first you will be
prompted for the model of your keyboard.
At first, ...

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Documentation/contributor/quick-start.itexi:205: Press Enter to show
further models.  In most cases it will be
In most cases, ...

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Documentation/contributor/quick-start.itexi:206: sufficient to choose
number 71 (Generic, 105 keys).  After that
After that, ...

https://codereview.appspot.com/561360043/diff/547520043/Documentation/contributor/quick-start.itexi#newcode207
Documentation/contributor/quick-start.itexi:207: choose your keyboard
layout.  Now you can customize the function of
Now, ...
Do you detect a pattern here? :)

https://codereview.appspot.com/561360043/diff/547520043/Documentation/contributor/quick-start.itexi#newcode208
Documentation/contributor/quick-start.itexi:208: your AltGr key. 
Normally you will use the default layout settings,
Normally, ...

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Documentation/contributor/quick-start.itexi:209: so take number 1.  The
same holds for the question whether you want
... the question of whether ...

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Documentation/contributor/quick-start.itexi:211: At last you will be
asked if you want to configure
At last, ...

https://codereview.appspot.com/561360043/diff/547520043/Documentation/contributor/quick-start.itexi#newcode213
Documentation/contributor/quick-start.itexi:213: Presumably you will not
need this, so you can safely type @q{no}.
Presumably, ...

https://codereview.appspot.com/561360043/diff/547520043/Documentation/contributor/quick-start.itexi#newcode216
Documentation/contributor/quick-start.itexi:216: To setup your system
language(charset, localized messages etc.),
set up

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Documentation/contributor/quick-start.itexi:228: Finally you should run
a setup script.  If you're on the command line
Finally, ...

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